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Director- Sobhith Camera person- Rishab Art Director-Natsha Gandhi Music, Sound Effects and Lighting- Amrit

Screenplay EXT. FUNERAL PYRE – MUMBAI – 10 AUGUST 2006 STANDING in front of a funeral pyre, the sound of a boy SOBBING breaks through the silence. FLASHBACK – INT. DARK CORRIDOR – 31ST JULY – 2006 RISHAB AND ADITYA WALK along they see an open door, they decide to walk in. INT. – DARK ROOM – A FEW SECONDS LATER The room is DIMLY LIT, they look around the room to find a man STANDING in front of a desk, it seemed like he was waiting for them. They spot a knife on the mans desk. They decide to RUN for it, as they begin to move backwards, the man WHIPS around, with the knife in his hands. Rishab runs towards the door to open it while Aditya FIGHTS WITH SUNIL. Rishab turns the knob but in vain, the door had been locked from outside. ADITYA Rishab run for it!!! RISHAB The door is locked!! There is utter COMMOTION, just then they hear a LOUD BANG outside. Taking advantage of the situation Aditya SNACHES the knife from Sunil, Aditya GRINS as Rishab continues trying to open the door. Just then the door EXPLODES open. Rishab gets THROWN to the floor, Sunil GRABS the knife from Aditya’s hand as the police officer ENTERS. BLACKOUT EXT. – FUNERAL PYRE – MUMBAI – 10TH AUGUST 2006 Family and friends stand in front of the funeral pyre, CRYING for the one who they lost in a TERRIBLE FIGHT A few days ago. Everyone WALKS AWAY only 1 person stands there, thinking about the loss he has suffered. After a while he walks away towards the SETTING sun. ASSESSMENT CRITERIA FOR SCREEN WRITING There is too mucha ction and not enough character development in this scene. Motivation of characters is unclear. The use of so many flasbacks makes the storyline confusing. It would have been better to choose a scene that focuses on character development such as the son, sitting with his father on his death bed.
 * Originality of the script: 2.5
 * Development of Ideas- conflict, characterisation and setting: 2.5
 * Conventions of screenplay: 3
 * Spelling Grammar and Punctuation 3